Mirror Silver Leaf
Mirror Silver Leaf
Please review my poem and comment! Thanks 
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When It Rained
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Melted rainbows splashed onto earth,
Blossoming tulips upon their re-birth;
Silver raindrops fell, cleansing the land,
Raising the scent of the freshly soaked sand.
Thousand mirages mirrored on the drops
Kissing adieu to trembling leaf-tops;
Misty silk coated on each window pane
Hugged by the chilly wind bringing the rain.
Waking myriad colors from a trance,
Peacocks began their delirious dance;
Angels beat on their celestial drum,
Flashing the sparks that bid Rain-God welcome.
Nimbus tears purified one and all
That they could touch on the course of their fall;
Silvery crystals blanketed earth's crest,
Soothing and healing and quenching the thirst.
Your poem was wonderful! I knew from the first stanza it was going to be wonderful.
Your poem contains all the qualities of a good poem.
Rhythm- Your poem has great rhythm and rhyming. Except for the third stanza, the last line has too many syllables and kind of throws off that stanza, if you want to perfect your poem even more try revising that line.
Vocabulary- Your vocabulary in this poem is amazing and vivid. It takes your reader to each scene described.
Figurative language- Your figurative language in this poem is wonderful. MAPS; an acronym that represents Metaphor, Alliteration, Personification and Simile. Mostly you have personification and metaphors mostly. Be proud because metaphors are the hardest of all, and you have mastered those!
GREAT JOB!
well done
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